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Giles's avatar

Yes. Perfect length for how you handled it too, I think.

Giles's avatar

Even the title is superb!

Alicia's avatar

Nice!

Cedric's avatar

Very nice. I like the warping of the initial sentence. That’s sort of the approach I have with my poetry where I take common phrases and skewer or twist them.

Hellish Views - Harry Evans's avatar

It's always fun isn't it!!

Jamie B.'s avatar

Very cool!

Hellish Views - Harry Evans's avatar

Thanks! Not my best but it's fun

Stella's avatar

Cool little poem x

Hellish Views - Harry Evans's avatar

I'm happy you liked it